Nako Mortifer

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Name:

Nako Mortifer

Sex:

Male

Birth-Date:

November 2304

Age:

6 Years

Species:

Crescent Moon

Pack:

Former Loner

Rank:

Beta

Duty:

Advisor

Appearance:

Nako's main fur color is gray with ankles of black fur and paws of white fur. He has small splotches of black, brown, and white on his chest with thin strips of fur missing all over his body. Scars cover his lean and speed built frame with the most prominent being across his right eye which is colored sapphire while his left eye is grey.
Various feathers from dead birds are woven to his head fur and ears.

Skills:

Has a strong survival instinct. Scavenging, hunting small game, and fishing.

Personality:

Nako is a quiet wolf with a permanent expression of sadness on his face. He has had almost no contact with the wolves of Estysion, instead preferring a loners life of solitude away from the packs. When Nako sees another wolf, usually before they see him, he observes from them for awhile before making an attempt to approach them. If they appear uninteresting or hostile he simply walks away. If Nako deems the wolf to be approachable then he will do so abet awkwardly and with much caution. Though the wolf he approaches may be the friendliest wolf out here, Nako will still be ready to run due to past treatment. Its not that particular wolfs fault Nako is so distrusting, it's because of all the other wolves that have mistreated and physically harmed him that he is this way.

History:

Nako was born to his mother and father during a lean winter. As the sole survivor of his litter he was quiet and despondent towards his parents who neglected him in his upbringing. Leaving his uncaring family behind at the age of two years he tried to join various packs, though these attempts are shown with the scars all over his body. Eventually these tally marks got the better of him and lead him to a life of solitude.

Other:

RPer:

Talon

[The Moon]

just a little thing...
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Hello. Your character is definitely unique, but there are a few things you need to work on before he can be accepted. The main problem areas are his appearance, lack of detail in personality and history, and a few things that simply are not allowed on this site.

First, his appearance states that he has navy blue fur. WfMN is not a fantasy wolf RPG, so such color is not allowed. You may choose a similar color such as pure black or maybe a dark gray and perhaps you can expand and say that the fur appears blue in certain light. The format that you have chosen for the appearance is very hard to follow with neither defined lists nor complete sentences. Remember that I'm not asking you to completely change his appearance! I really do love the way he looks right now: sort of like a crazy appearance that reflects his spirit.

Second, he seems underdeveloped in the personality department. I stand by what I say that length does not equal quality, but what you have stated, I can sum up as "Nako is a quiet, sad wolf who spends a while deciding before he goes up to meet a wolf or not." I suppose all I'll ask is for you to build on that and perhaps explain how he does interact with others and how his general temperament is. I think you should build on his "feral child" aspect--that he is sort of like a definite wolf of the wild and that survival is his greatest end.

Third, and perhaps most important of all, is that his history suggests that he left his family when he was young. Orphaned puppies, which is on the banned list, is short-hand for "no parents growing up". You can leave him with his uncaring family and still have him be a distant, quiet wolf.

I really love his concept so far and am only asking you to build on it so he has more detail to define him as a whole character <3

[talon]

Updated

[The Moon]

accepted!
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Yay! I am so happy that you took the time to edit the bio. You've really done a great job, especially with beefing up the personality. I fixed the year in his birth date as well.